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"Plain English is clear, straightforward expression,
using only as many words as are necessary. It is language
that avoids obscurity, inflated vocabulary and convoluted
sentence construction. It is not baby talk, nor is
it a simplified version of the English language. Writers
of plain English let their audience concentrate on
the message instead of being distracted by complicated
language. They make sure that their audience understands
the message easily."
Professor
Robert Eagleson
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The
main goal in writing is to put your message across
clearly and concisely. Readers want an effortless,
readable and clear writing style. Plain English is
clear English it is simple and direct but not
simplistic.
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Newspapers
such as the Financial Times or the Washington
Post; magazines such as The Economist, Time
and Newsweek; and best-selling books use the
straightforward, plain English style. Why? Because
professional writers and editors know a clear style
helps their readers understand and absorb the information
presented.
Around 90 percent of the newspaper subeditors
time spent improving an article for publication is
cutting, simplifying and rearranging the words into
a clearer style. Heres a typical subeditors
redraft of a press release. The subeditor is breaking
the poor writing habits of the author, to produce
a better and stronger writing style.
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Original Press Release
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A
leading industry expert, Mr Bob Jones, head
of the Small Business Bureau, claimed today
the Governments proposal to introduce
minimum working week legislation will require
wider public consultation to be undertaken.
If the government follows this advice, interested
parties will be given an opportunity to understand
and raise their concerns prior to the legislation
being enacted by Parliament. Industry,
trade bodies and unions need to study the draft
bill before the Government introduces this new
law, said Mr Jones.
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Mr
Bob Jones, head of the Small Business Bureau,
said of the Governments 35-hour working
week proposal: Industry, trade bodies
and unions need to study the draft bill before
the Government introduces this new law.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words: 80
Style
Index: 75
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Words: 35
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Style Index: 0
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Style
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Plain
English editing and a professional subeditors
skills are similar. Both use commonsense rules to
guide them to produce a more concise, clearer style.
The 10 most important editing principles are:
1. Think
of your readers needs.
2. Organize your content well.
3. Write in a natural style as if
you were talking to the reader.
4. Keep sentences short.
5. Use active verbs.
6. Be specific rather than general.
7. Cut all redundant words and phrases.
8. Use simpler words rather than
complex words.
9. Cut down on jargon.
10. Edit vigorously.
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The
secret to becoming a better writer is to use these
principles to edit your draft. Here is a typical business
memo. Good editing, using these principles cuts its
length by more than half and results in a clearer
style.
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The
Staff Booking Database
The
main purpose of the Staff Booking Database (SBD)
is for the recording of staff booking requests
which in turn provides the total recurring audit
cost for each client.
As
a result of the recent merger that has taken
place and hence the increase in the numbers
of staff and clients, it is important that each
business unit (BU) be used in such a way as
to track and collate all staff movements. The
use of the SBD allows managers in each BU to
rethink on an annual basis, the way the audit
was performed and make any necessary amendments
to the amount of staff and the mix of skills
required for the following year.
Implementing
a formal process and system will not only make
sure that all staff are receiving the right
type of experience and exposure as they progress,
but it should also be of assistance in guaranteeing
our clients are receiving the most suitable
mix of staff.
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The
Staff Booking Database
This
Database records staff booking requests to calculate
the audit costs for each client.
Because
the merger increased our staff and client numbers,
each business unit can now use the Staff Booking
Database to track and collate staff movements.
The Database allows managers to rethink how
they perform the audit each year and change
the staff and skills needed the following year.
This
yearly review makes sure staff have the right
work experience and our clients receive the
best staff to carry out each audit.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words: 164
Style
Index: 106
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Words:
89 (59% shorter)
Style Index: 11
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Only
one out of 50 business and government documents is
in plain English. Why? Because untrained writers draft
documents full of passive verbs, long sentences, wordy
phrases, complex words and other style faults.
The
main problem in all writing is not a grammatical slip
or an occasional typing error. We all have poor writing
habits we pick up from reading hundreds of memos,
business letters and reports that come across our
desk. For every genuine grammar mistake corrected,
good subeditors will make dozens of style changes.
Do you recognise the typical business style?
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As
the applicant, it is a requirement that you
provide a mailing address and an identification
number when an application is made for a hardship
grant.
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You
need to send a mailing address and an identification
number when you apply for a hardship grant.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
26
Style
Index: 76
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Words:
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Style Index: 0
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I
trust this clarifies the matter for you and
look forward to hearing from you in due course
in respect of your decision whether or not you
intend to take out a loan.
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let me know if you want to take out a loan.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
34
Style
Index: 121
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Words:
12 (65% Shorter)
Style Index: 0
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A
questionnaire was circulated to the project
team that were based internally. Of the ten
people who were sent the questionnaire only
5 replied which is somewhat disappointing. Of
those replying virtually all were aware of the
history of the pilot advertising campaign and
generally speaking meeting the aims and objectives
of the company. The strategy was viewed to be
satisfactory to meet the campaigns aims
although there was some concern expressed over
the limited budget available. All respondents
at a managerial level were positive that the
campaign did meet the requirements of the company
to increase its market share.
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disappointing five out of ten managers replied
to the internal project teams questionnaire.
Of those replying:
four knew of the pilots aims,
everyone thought the strategy was satisfactory,
two thought the budget was too small.
All
managers were sure the campaign met the companys
need to increase its market share.
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STYLEWRITERS
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Words:
95
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Style
Index: 100 |
Words:
51 (50% shorter)
Style Index:
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StyleWriter Helps |
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StyleWriter
helps you write in plain English by identifying words
and phrases in your writing that detract from clarity.
It questions your use of long sentences and passive
verbs and aims to make you think about every word
you write.
StyleWriter does not encourage a standard style
that everyone should follow. Rather, by helping you
break out of the typical business writing style, StyleWriter
encourages you to express yourself in your own words.
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Benefits of Plain English |
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What
are the savings in using plain English? |
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote
in plain English? |
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail? |
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What
are the savings in using plain English?
National
governments, councils, multinational corporations,
major industry bodies and so on have adopted the plain
English model for sound, commercial reasons
plain English saves time and money. The savings claimed
for plain English are remarkable:
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The US Navy estimated plain English could save it
between $250$300 million every year.
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General Electric saved $275,000 by redrafting manuals
into plain English.
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The US Department of Veterans Affairs saved $40,000
redrafting one standard letter into plain English.
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Customers in three surveys of standard letters from
banks unanimously preferred the plain English versions.
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British Telecom cut customer queries by 25 percent
by using plain English.
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The Royal Mail saved £500,000 in nine months by
redesigning one form in plain English.
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UK businesses lose £6 billion a year because of
badly written letters.
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A UK Government Plain English initiative saved £9
million in printing costs.
These
savings come from organizations training key staff,
employing professional writers and editors. But these
people, can only edit a few of the thousands of documents
produced every day in large organizations. Imagine
the savings if you used training and editing software
to guarantee everyone used plain English in every
document.
Source:
Joe Kimble Writing for Dollars
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How
much would your organization save if everyone wrote
in plain English?
Unfortunately,
the costs of poor communication do not appear in the
balance sheet. If they did, you would do something
to control them. In the following examples, the biggest
cost is staff time (authors time plus the readers
time), multiplied by the number of employees who receive
the document.
1. The
United Kingdoms National Audit Office estimated
the cost of producing one page in government departments
varied between £3.50 ($5) to over £100 ($160).
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The low figure was for a one-page letter, typed,
printed and sent to 200 people resulting in a bill
£700 ($1,120).
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The higher figure was for each page of a short report
that goes through several authors and drafts, before
a senior manager presented it to the management
committee. This means the cost of such a 50-page
report read by 15 senior managers was £5,000 ($8,000).
2. A
government department sent a two-page memo to 15,000
employees that took an average of 10 minutes to read
and process. The real cost to the department was $100,000
in salaries, overheads and associated costs. The memo
was about keeping staff kitchens clean! Was it really
a $100,000 problem?
3. A
bank had a sales letter rewritten by a professional,
plain English editor. The clearer, redraft brought
in an extra $11 million of new business. No conventional
accounting method would record the previous $11 million
missed business opportunity.
4. One
council sent 1.3 million pages of committee reports
to councillors in one year. If councillors worked
a sixteen-hour day, seven-day week, reading a page
every minute, they would eventually get through all
the documents after 3.7 years.
Try
a simple calculation
Work
out the number of sheets of paper, e-mails and faxes
in your organization produces in one working day.
Estimate the cost of each of these documents at $10
a page. Now calculate by the number of people who
have to read them and add $1 for each person reading
each document. (To give you an idea of this figure,
a typical office worker receives over 100 messages
a day). That will give you rough idea of the cost
of your paperwork for each day. Then multiply the
figure by 240 to find out a realistic cost of paperwork
in your organization every year.
Plain
English will cut this bill by 30 percent.
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Why
are governments and major corporations adopting plain
English?
Today,
governments, major corporations, trade associations
and professional bodies across the world have adopted
plain language as the style for writing all documents.
For example, in the USA, presidents Eisenhower, Ford,
Carter and Clinton have all issued directives for
federal employees to write in plain language. In July
1998, President Clinton stated: The Federal
Governments writing must be in plain language.
By using plain language, we send a clear message about
what the Government is doing, what it requires, and
what services it offers. Plain language saves the
Government and the private sector time, effort, and
money.
Writing
in plain language could cut the Federal Governments
paperwork by one-third, save billions of dollars and
make everyones life whether working for
the government or in the private sector much
simpler and easier. Ordinary Americans should be able
to understand what their Government says to them without
having to study the text closely or to consult an
expert.
The
Federal Government has worked hard to introduce clearer
written communications. Many government bodies such
as Education, Transportation, Internal Revenue Service,
Securities Exchange Commission, and Veterans Affairs
have run plain-language initiatives. For two years,
the Vice-Presidents office coordinated this
work and encouraged all Federal employees to adopt
a clearer writing style. But today, perhaps only one
in fifty Federal employees uses a plain language style.
US
Government runs plain English software pilot
The
US Federal Government is now running a trial of Editor
Softwares StyleWriter and Electronic
Writing Course. The Environmental Protection
Agency is using both programs to train staff in
plain English editing skills and to evaluate the software
for use throughout in other department and agencies.
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Why
do nearly all plain English initiatives fail?
Most
organizations recognize customer letters, brochures,
e-mails, management reports should be clear and concise
but most documents fail any basic, plain English test.
The
traditional response has been to put employees on
business writing courses and expect one days
tuition to transform the way they think and write.
In tests, people going on traditional business writing
courses often showed little improvement in writing
style. Statistics on writing style show there is typically
only a 10 percent improvement one week after the course
and a month later most participants fell back to their
pre-course standard.
There
are many reasons for this failure. Here are the important
ones.
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The culture of business
and government encourages poor writing.
Most peoples writing style comes from the
documents they see around them. So unless you train
everyone in effective writing, improving writing
standards is difficult.
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Most people think they
do write clearly, although at least 80 percent of
documents in organizations are badly written and
full of poor style faults. It always
comes as a shock when people see how much clearer
documents can become with strong editing.
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Managers believe the problem
is never with their writing style, but with the
style of their staff. Managers happily
send their staff to writing courses. But after the
course, the managers continue to redraft the new,
clearer style back into management-speak. The unspoken
message to the person trying to write clearly is:
Dont write clearly, write as I do.
- Most
writers are so close to their jargon and style they
cannot see their writing faults. Most
writers have no idea why others find their documents
difficult to read and understand.
- Many
people falsely believe the long-winded, complex
style of business and government is the expected
and agreed style. Many employees look
at existing documents and copy the style. This means
people who normally speak clearly and write well,
quickly pick up the bad writing habits and stilted
style of their colleagues.
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people learned to write at university and college
where length and an impressive vocabulary seemed
to be a virtue.
Yet in the workplace, everyone wants short and clear
documents to make their lives easier.
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Only one person in 50 attends training in effective
writing.
Organizing and running courses is time-consuming
and expensive. If you use outside consultants to
run them, they can cost up to $1,500 for ten people.
Plain language software is much more economical.
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Theres no backup to put any effective writing
training into practice.
Most people only remember one-third of the training
ideas and put even fewer into practice. Plain English
editing software means writers constantly learn
ways to improve their style.
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Why
does plain English software guarantee success?
To
guarantee everyone in an organization writes clearly,
you need to change the communication culture, train
staff and give them the tools to back up the training.
This has proved impossible without software.
In
the same way running a spelling checker on your word
processor guarantees everyone writes without typing
and spelling mistakes, plain English software can
guarantee the benefits of clear writing. Organizations
can immediately train all staff using our Electronic
Writing Course. Each employee can then run StyleWriter
through letters, memos and reports until drafting
in plain English becomes the standard throughout the
organization. Organizations can also work with us
to create an Electronic House Style to make
sure every document keeps to your house-style rules
and conventions.
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