Essay - Peer Review for Portfolio Draft 1 Poetry Has Often Been...

Peer review for portfolio

Draft 1

Poetry has often been an innocuous demand of social and political change, as it can be quickly developed and then easily smuggled out ***** any s*****uation in the coat pocket of the writer, or even written years later in mem*****y of an event or situation, where life *****d ***** liberty ***** ***** lost. The images that poetry conveys are as strong as any written in journalistic prose. Poetry lends itself to politics almost more than any other form of literature, ***** it can convey a quip of shocking images and materials that can be approached by the reader as "real" or if not ***** at least possible ***** make the reader question his or her auth*****ity and knowledge of ***** world, frequently insular and protected. Two poems in particular bring this to mind ***** than most. They are in ***** of themselves a recounting of events, ***** humanity is degraded, yet both ***** examples of the point of view ***** the survivor, the silent witness ***** ***** that change them and change the world around *****.

Draft 2

***** can ***** quickly ***** and then easily smuggled out of ***** situation in the coat ***** of the writer or even written years later ***** memory ***** an *****t where life ***** or ***** has been lost. The auth***** or others ***** then read it later as a reminder of a demand for social and pol*****ical *****. The images that poetry ***** are ***** strong as any written in ***** prose. Poetry lends itself to ***** al***** more than any other ***** of literature, as it can convey a ***** of shock*****g ***** *****nd materi*****s that the reader ***** approach ***** "real" or if not real at least possible and make ***** reader ***** his ***** her *****ority and ***** ***** the world, ***** insular ***** protected. Two poems in particular bring t***** ***** mind more ***** mos*****, "Punishment" by Irish Poet Seamus Heaney and "The Colonel" by American poet Carolyn Forche. Both of these works are in and of themselves a ***** of events, where humanity is degraded, yet both are examples of the point of view ***** ***** *****, the ***** witness to ***** that change them ***** change the world around *****. The most important structural *****s in this second draft are the removal of passive voice and the creation of a complete *****, so the p*****ragraph st*****s alone, as an **********.

Draft 3

Poetry can be quickly developed and ***** easily smuggled out of any situation in the coat pocket of the writer or even written ***** later ***** memory of an *****t where ***** and or liberty had been lost. This power is left the poet; ***** recount atrocity and build ideas associated with awareness ***** social change. The ***** ***** then respond emotionally ***** even actively, by envisioning and challenging the ***** in ***** work or ***** taking action to ***** them in the future. It can rem*****d the